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Saved Intro Idea in the Wise Man's Child (working title) series:

In the Pangaea of Maginari...

The land is split into 6 kingdoms, each ruled by a Wise Man. The 6 Wise Men ruled their respective kingdoms through the mastery of their magic, holding dominion over one the 6 elements: Fire, Water, Lightning, Nature, Sun, and Shadow. 

Each nation hangs on the balance, as their Wise Men continue their uneasy alliance. Magic continued to be a very way of life in each kingdom.  However, in the fire kingdom of Fyrigus, a new movement was invented that would shake the core of the 6 kingdoms: industry.

The people of each country no longer looked towards magic for basic livelihoods. Production and alternate sources of power were more efficient than the costs of magic. Cities rapidly expanded to accommodate this ground-breaking revolution. As the humans reached further outward into the lands, they turned to the monsters that once caused trouble for them in the past.

Goblins, orcs, harpies, centaurs, mermaids, and more were convinced to give up their destructive, barbaric ways and live among humans in pursuit of more comfortable lives. Soon, the lands became a cultural melting pot. Gone were the days where man and monster fought each other through swords and magic.

This paradigm shift spelled doom for the Wise Men. Their magic no longer convinced the people to follow their rule. Soon, infighting began among the six. Worse yet, a mysterious cat tells the 6 of a prophecy. The first child born among the wise men will decide the fate of the land of Maginari. It will either be back to their seperate rule, or together under the child. Enraged, the wise men look to the fire Wise Man, and begin to conspire for the death of his first-born son. Thus, the story of the Wise Man's Child begins.

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:iconuber-dan:
Uber-Dan Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds interesting.
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:iconmrspanyard:
MrSpanyard Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2017
Nice story. A teeny tiny bit of Avatar: The last Airbender in there, but interesting, nonetheless.

I would maybe suggest (for the lore, if you want), that maybe the industrialization acceptance was stronger in some kingdoms than others. I mean, maybe the Fire kingdom started the Industry, but the movement was weak and the machines were primitive and unreliable compared with magic. Then the Lightning Kingdom, seeing the potential of this new "Industry", offered to help them, evolving the industry to be a true competitor with magic. Further advanced once the Water Kingdom gave up their initial skepticism.
Sun and Shadow took longer, and the last one, the "Nature" kingdom.
That would make the fire Wise Man less of a villain, as it was not /exclusively/ his fault.

But as I typed, seems quite nice the way it is.
Maginari...
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:iconherooftime1000:
herooftime1000 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2017
It's a good idea. It slowly transform from coal and steam, to electricity, to hydroelectric equipment.

Also, the Fire Wise man is not at fault. He had a laissez faire method of running his kingdom, unlike the others who tried to keep their power. He foresaw that their usefulness and authority dwindling through time. Instead, he dedicated his time to his son and allowed technology to flourish, instead of suppressing it for his own purposes.
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:iconmrspanyard:
MrSpanyard Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2017
True, but I'd keep the technology not so advanced, so the magic can still kick some asses if needed.

The child would be kind of a mix between an engineer and a wizard or something else? Also, is this story for some kind of project?
I'd like to help, but it looks like you're pretty much covered in there (sans the title, but you'll get it, I'm sure)
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:iconherooftime1000:
herooftime1000 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2017
It's a world I want to create. To have a series of titles centered around this world. It doesn't have to focus on the Child, but his friends that he meets along the way.
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:iconmrspanyard:
MrSpanyard Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2017
Looks promising.
Best of lucks.
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